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Feedback from my rough draft

AREAS TO WORK ON

General point - "slow down and let it breathe" 


Re record all presenter links

 

Need pauses after some interview's and cue's to sound more like Radio 4

Record myself knocking on the door before entering Stuarts home and introducing myself to him - Actuality needed

'Theres a fundamental challenge' - repetition in Mary's clip and then the presenter cue

Shorten Pete Trainor clips either with a link or shorten it down

Cut down presenter cue

Try and end a report on someone else conclusion - create a montage of voices to solidify my conclusion

Strengths so far

Good beginning to the documentary

Mary McCarthy interview is strong despite being my only phone interview

Pete Trainor interview is strong

 

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