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Feedback from my rough draft
AREAS TO WORK ON
General point - "slow down and let it breathe"
Re record all presenter links
Need pauses after some interview's and cue's to sound more like Radio 4
Record myself knocking on the door before entering Stuarts home and introducing myself to him - Actuality needed
'Theres a fundamental challenge' - repetition in Mary's clip and then the presenter cue
Shorten Pete Trainor clips either with a link or shorten it down
Cut down presenter cue
Try and end a report on someone else conclusion - create a montage of voices to solidify my conclusion
Strengths so far
Good beginning to the documentary
Mary McCarthy interview is strong despite being my only phone interview
Pete Trainor interview is strong
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