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Feedback from my rough draft

AREAS TO WORK ON

General point - "slow down and let it breathe" 


Re record all presenter links

 

Need pauses after some interview's and cue's to sound more like Radio 4

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Record myself knocking on the door before entering Stuarts home and introducing myself to him - Actuality needed

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'Theres a fundamental challenge' - repetition in Mary's clip and then the presenter cue

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Shorten Pete Trainor clips either with a link or shorten it down

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Cut down presenter cue

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Try and end a report on someone else conclusion - create a montage of voices to solidify my conclusion

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Strengths so far

Good beginning to the documentary

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Mary McCarthy interview is strong despite being my only phone interview

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Pete Trainor interview is strong

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