
Feedback from my rough draft
AREAS TO WORK ON
General point - "slow down and let it breathe"
Re record all presenter links
Need pauses after some interview's and cue's to sound more like Radio 4
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Record myself knocking on the door before entering Stuarts home and introducing myself to him - Actuality needed
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'Theres a fundamental challenge' - repetition in Mary's clip and then the presenter cue
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Shorten Pete Trainor clips either with a link or shorten it down
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Cut down presenter cue
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Try and end a report on someone else conclusion - create a montage of voices to solidify my conclusion
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Strengths so far
Good beginning to the documentary
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Mary McCarthy interview is strong despite being my only phone interview
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Pete Trainor interview is strong
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